Over the break I have read two blogs. One was Eliza’s: Harry VS.
Ron: Overexposed VS. Overshadowed. The other was Joyce’s: Gale vs. Peeta. I
liked both of them very much for very different reasons.
I liked Joyce’s blog post because it was so direct, organized,
and semi-personal. It had the classic structure of introduction, example, other
example, other side’s examples, conclusion. She compares Peeta and Gale in
terms of love for Katniss. She gives reasons why Peeta should be with Katniss,
and why he would be good for her. She then goes to Gale’s side and explains why
he should be with Katniss and why he would be good for her. In the end however,
she explains why Peeta would be better, thus concluding the post. She also
makes it sort of personal by connecting to a topic everyone knows (the hunger
games), and voices her bias opinion as well in the middle of it.
Eliza’s post was also very well organized. It looked as though
it was an example from how a bog post should be written. That’s how perfect it
was. She chose an interesting topic from a well-known book that the average
student would not think of, therefore making you interested. She wrote about
who has more weight to carry in the Harry Potter series, Ron Weasley, or the
man himself, Harry Potter. This is quite an interesting topic because nobody
ever really talks about that. When you think about it, Ron is probably just as
troubled as Harry. He’s poor, unimportant, “overshadowed,” and just pretty much
bad at everything. When you think about it, you can understand why in Eliza’s
perfectly structured conclusion she says that it is a tie. Eliza’s post is well
organized because it follows the same rules of the 4 paragraph essay.
For my future blogs, I would like to be a lot more organized in
my writings. Have an obvious introduction that clearly introduces my main idea,
and the theme/subject. Then 2 paragraphs of two examples and their explanations
towards relation to my main idea. And after that, a nice conclusion that sums
it all up nicely, smoothly, and quickly.
What the student di wrong was place a citation from another
person’s work and pretending as though he/she was the one who wrote it. He or
she could have included directly before the citation: “A good way to express
what I want to put into words is said form the authour of this site: http://http//www.vangoghgallery.com/painting/starryindex.html.”
- Don’t look at the piece when paraphrasing.
-DON’T COPY AND PASTE EVEN IF YOU THINK YOU WILL CHANGE
PARTS.
- Make sure to include where you cited it somewhere near it.
Tim DeCristopher is a climate activist who has strived to
protect our enviorment, and the people of amerlica against big corporations. He
is not an extremist who goes in and blows the “bad guys” away with bombs. He
organizes peaceful protests. He was sent to jail fo a bit because he
interrupted an auticon for an oil company. An energy company has contributed $25,000 to his legal
defence. DeChristopher did not like that this company secretly outsourced to
forieng countries, so he wrote a well written email to the company stating that
if they did not stop outsourcing and closing down power plants in America, he
would refuse the donation they gave and orgainize a protest against them. The
jail he was in saw this as a threat, so he had to be moved into a padded,
isolated, small confinement with one other man and limited fresh air.
This is extremely
unfair and unjust for more then one reason. He has not done anything that
has ever actually hurt someone, so the padding and confinement is unnecessary.
There is absolutely no evidence that he would hurt himself, or anyone else from
this letter. All he threatens to do is organize a protest, which is completely
leagal and does not deserve to be punished.
Another person who has written a similar letter in similar
conditions has gone unpunished, and for that the results were rewarding. This
man was Martin Luther King Jr. According to the article, the same rules that
restricted DeChristopher’s letter would have also restricted a letter that
Martin Luther King Jr. sent regarding a political boycott. Why should one go
unpunished while another does not?
